Ok, let’s take this example for the reader who still insists that the C.A.R is a death penalty of sorts.
This is an extract from C.A.R Section2- Airworthiness- Series ‘A’ Part IV. The subject of this Part is : Airworthiness Regulation and Safety Oversight of Engineering Activities of Operators. Let’s take a really long sentence. We don’t have to go far! Look under the Objective, first paragraph, that is 1.1, starting mid paragraph:
“The Safety oversight airworthiness program is aimed to detect the weaknesses in the engineering activities of the operators, maintenance and other related organizations so that necessary corrective measures can be taken in time before they become a potential safety hazard and that the capability of the organization to exercise airworthiness control be maintained at or above the level required by the regulations.”
Regards the contents, that was one sentence of nothing but repetition and jargon!
Phew! Midway through that my mind was almost screaming at me “Stop! Please!!” And that is after having passed the exam almost a decade ago.
A few amongst us will have absolutely no problem in identifying what is being said in that sentence. Not unusual though, a lot of us will have to read it and re-read it over and over again a few times to try and understand firstly what it means, and then, in what context!
Let’s try and decipher this sentence and see if we can make it any easier for ourselves to grasp. I’d write this whole sentence of jargon in 2-3 sentences and make much greater sense of it, as follows:
“The aim is to detect the weaknesses in the engineering activities of the operators, maintenance and other related organizations. This will validate necessary corrective measures to be taken in time before they become a potential safety hazard. It will also ensure the organization maintains airworthiness control at or above the level required by the regulations.”
Now that is 3 sentences, and it still not as lengthy! Most importantly, it has greater clarity, without taking out the relevance, the emphasis, or the urgency of the terms used.
Still like to argue that the C.A.R is a river full of crocodiles waiting to gobble you up?!
This is an extract from C.A.R Section2- Airworthiness- Series ‘A’ Part IV. The subject of this Part is : Airworthiness Regulation and Safety Oversight of Engineering Activities of Operators. Let’s take a really long sentence. We don’t have to go far! Look under the Objective, first paragraph, that is 1.1, starting mid paragraph:
“The Safety oversight airworthiness program is aimed to detect the weaknesses in the engineering activities of the operators, maintenance and other related organizations so that necessary corrective measures can be taken in time before they become a potential safety hazard and that the capability of the organization to exercise airworthiness control be maintained at or above the level required by the regulations.”
Regards the contents, that was one sentence of nothing but repetition and jargon!
Phew! Midway through that my mind was almost screaming at me “Stop! Please!!” And that is after having passed the exam almost a decade ago.
A few amongst us will have absolutely no problem in identifying what is being said in that sentence. Not unusual though, a lot of us will have to read it and re-read it over and over again a few times to try and understand firstly what it means, and then, in what context!
Let’s try and decipher this sentence and see if we can make it any easier for ourselves to grasp. I’d write this whole sentence of jargon in 2-3 sentences and make much greater sense of it, as follows:
“The aim is to detect the weaknesses in the engineering activities of the operators, maintenance and other related organizations. This will validate necessary corrective measures to be taken in time before they become a potential safety hazard. It will also ensure the organization maintains airworthiness control at or above the level required by the regulations.”
Now that is 3 sentences, and it still not as lengthy! Most importantly, it has greater clarity, without taking out the relevance, the emphasis, or the urgency of the terms used.
Still like to argue that the C.A.R is a river full of crocodiles waiting to gobble you up?!
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